Tuesday, April 7, 2009

Camp Recount by Caleb

Here is just a taster of the quality writing which has been published on the Room 15 writing log. Well done Caleb!!!


The Mudslide
By Caleb Hewson
I stared up at the massive, black mudslide. Instantly I was terrified by the sight of it. Despite that I was really excited. Then I slowly began climbing up the steps, the mud squelching in between my cold toes. Eventually I reached the peak of the terror-filled mudslide. My body shaking in the wind. I fixed my eyes on the mud at the bottom. I could smell the foul stench of cow manure. Suddenly a volt of fear shot through me like electricity. Then I turned around, I could hear kids screaming and shouting in excitement! When the kids came to the top of the slide I let them past me. Scared. Cold. I didn't know what to do? Suddenly I heard a giant splash! By the looks of it I could see BenV climbing up the steps. It was my turn. I was horrified but I forced myself. I could see the detergent dribbling down the slide like a snake. Anyway I jumped and landed on the slide. I was zooming down as fast as a jaguar could run! The freezing water was spraying up in my face. Without time to think about anything I hit the mud! It was cold and awful. So I immediately hurried out of the water like a hungry jackal looking for food. “Man that was awesome!!!!” I screeched. Then I sprinted up the muddy path again and went on the awesome fun-filled mudslide again. After about fifty goes I thought it was the best and most fun slide ever!!I was so proud of myself and so were my friends.

By Caleb Hewson


4 comments:

rachel said...

Hey Caleb,

Awesome writing on the mudslide. It made me want to have a slide!!

Rach (olly's mum)

Andrew Bird said...

Caleb - this writing is amazing - well done.

Anonymous said...

Hi Caleb,
I loved your descriptive sentences.

Megan(Caleb's proud mum!)

Anonymous said...

this is awesome!!!!!